21st century is all about ‘bonding’.
There are different kinds of bonding, as in psychological term, such as a
bonding to one’s primary environment or the one to the strong authorities such
as dictators. Without the bond, people become more independent as an individual
entity. At the same time, it can make one feel isolated and extremely insecure.
This is a main reason why people cling to the bonds, even if that indicates
they are giving up their freedom. The bonding people are forming in 21st
century is different. It is a bonding to the public, when a person’s thoughts
or actions are strongly influenced by the public.
In 21st century, a phenomenon
that supports this whole ‘bonding’ idea is ‘social networking’. These days,
people keep in contact with each other through social networking sites such as ‘Facebook’,
‘twitter’ or blogs. They share ideas and communicate, and make new friends.
Most importantly and inevitably, they put information about themselves for the
public to view. While doing so, people get sensitive about what others-the public-think
about them. As they put more efforts and cares into them, they are being bound.
This even causes them to feel anxious when they find out the bond to the public
weakens. For instance, a person cares about number of ‘likes’ or comment on the
post on their Facebook page.
Not only the social networking sites but
also the media plays crucial role. Media’s primary role is to report events to
the people to know. Through the process, it is not only the reporting that they
are doing. They can lead their reports to certain direction to get sympathies
and formulate a ‘public opinion’. As there are more means to deliver the
message, thanks to development of technology, it spreads quickly and in a large
scale. It strongly influences individual’s opinion, brining their own opinion
to be like the one in the mainstream. As an example, some fast spread gossips
or rumors about socially prominent figures such as politicians or celebrities become
the target of public opinion, like witchcraft.
The idea of bonding stands out when we
observe how individuals care about values that many people believe in. As the
significance in reaching to a good and stable social status is increasing,
things such as getting good scores, going to good universities, or getting a
good job are being stressed. Meaning, greater emphasis is put on things that
people consider to be valuable or worthy in the society. Individuals, being
influenced, struggle to attain the expected level of work or possess things
that the public has put values into. This may leads them to forget about what
they really like and cared for, often seen in news articles on teens without
dreams they pursue, only focusing on values put by the public.
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Hey Gyung-Hyun!
답글삭제I really like your first topic about the SNS!! At first, while reading your introduction, I wondered why you though tindividual-public bonding would be important. And, I moved on to your second paragraph about the social network system. I thought it was a very close, practical example!
Well-written! :)
I thought that this was a very well organized essay that had a clear points. I liked how you elaborated your ideas with the term "bond." Your main points were persuasive, especially the conclusion, where you discussed the double-sidedness of bonding.
답글삭제I enjoyed reading it.
--> obsession on 'likes'=attention
yay im the first here!
답글삭제as usual, i always enjoy reading what you've wrote. you're just a too strong writer and your topic here is interesting too- i felt that this is definitely not the typical toefl style with typical structures and typical stories to tell.
i also liked your usage of apostrophes and repetitions for emphasis, your message clearly got across. one thing i'm curious about, although it's nothing related about your topic, shouldn't "21st century" be following the article "the"? i don't know, but i seemed to use that convention from i-don't-remember-when and it seemed normal to, but if it could be used without the article, what's the difference of placing the article and not doing that? just a curiosity i've had while reading this.
i always thank you for the good reads! and i will be looking forward to see you tmr, dont be sick :'(
oh apparently i wasntㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋㅋi never knew the comment had to be given approval to show up
답글삭제I think you chose one of the most important topics in this era. It is true that many people can not leave alone, but they have many different kinds of bondings with others. Many people say humans are very sociable. I really liked your topic therefore. However, I think this essay could have been slightly better if it had a more clear introduction. Introduction usually explains the main topic of the essay and therefore is very important. If you stated the term 'bonding' in a more clear manner, this could have attracted more readers.
답글삭제But overall, VERY GOOD ESSAY~~~!!